I hope you enjoy my No Kiss scene (below) that I wrote especially for you guys. And make sure you click HERE to see who else is participating and check out their scenes.
Get ready to swoon and feel the tension! (P.S. Anyone can sign up, even today--and feel free to share your fave No Kiss scene from a book/movie/show if writing one isn't your thing and don't forget to link back) :-)
No Kiss
“Look,” I said. “Are we going to do this or not?”
His blue eyes bored into mine and maybe it was the cheesy Christmas lights Stacey had hung around the room for her party, or maybe it was because this was the first time I’d ever stood this close to Jackson, but I noticed he had a little green in his eyes. Just a little.
“Um, yeah, yeah," he said. "Definitely, we’re doing this.”
“Well, then come on. Kiss me.”
He bit his lip. “Hang on, Kristy. It’s not that simple.”
“No.” He groaned.
“Well then what’s the problem? It’s not like you’ve never kissed anyone before.” Like Stacey. A lot. Especially in the far corner of the school where the lockers made a convenient hiding spot from teachers. And I wasn’t even going to hypothesize that he didn’t find me attractive. Maybe I was no Stacey to him, but I was certainly up there in the top 5% (at least) of the hottest girls in school. Jenna once worked the math.
“It’s just…” Jackson started, glancing around the room. “We’re in the middle of everyone. People are already staring.”
“Which is perfect!”
He shook his head. “Wouldn’t you rather, you know, go someplace private. If we went to Stacey’s room that would really—”
“No.” I snapped. “Kissing your girlfriend’s best friend in her bedroom at her own party would add a nice little eff you to this whole situation. But if we do it in there, no one will see and no one will report it back to her and that’s the whole point of this.” Though people probably would see us go in there and our mission would be achieved. But honestly, I wasn’t in the mood for the sort of rumors that might start. Kissing my best friend’s boyfriend in public—at her party—was enough.
“I just don’t know if I want to do this anymore.”
My mouth fell open. “You’re backing out? Jackson! This was your idea!”
“I know. But…I don’t know. I just, I don’t think I want to do this. Like this.” He sounded pained.
“Are you going to forgive her?” I asked, my voice sounding maybe a little louder and more hysterical then the situation warranted. But I was losing patience. We had a deal!
He shook his head. “Of course not. It’s just that since we started planning revenge on Stacey and Ada—”
“Don’t say his name!”
“Fine! But, just listen to what I’m trying to tell you. Please, Kristy.”
Somehow we’d moved closer together. Our hands both resting on the edge of the dining room table were nearly touching. The paper tablecloth, rumpled beneath our fingers, was the only barrier between them. His lip twitched and I realized I was close enough to see just the tiniest hint of stubble he’d missed shaving that morning on his chin.
“Kristy?” he asked, his voice low.
I pulled my eyes up toward his. We were even closer. Was this it? Was it finally going to happen?
His lips parted and I nervously checked the room. Yes. People were definitely watching. Even Stacey, gossiping in the corner with Jenna had a suspicious eye on us. Good, you cheating, backstabbing, boyfriend kissing slut! Watch me with your boyfriend and see how you like it!I turned back to Jackson and moved my fingers over the table cloth. Our hands touched. His skin was warm.
“Ready?” I breathed.
He bit his lip and swallowed. “Yeah.” He leaned in. I tilted my head up. Our lips were barely a breath apart.
There was an audible gasp from someone watching us, someone who knew what a scandal this kiss would be.
I squeezed Jackson’s fingers on the table as his other hand moved through my hair, pushing it behind my ear and smoothing it against my neck. Something tightened inside me as his cologne filled my senses. And then he was close. Too close.
His lips were by my ear. Which meant they were NOT on my lips and we were NOT about to kiss. What the…
“I want to kiss you, Kristy,” he whispered.
“Then do it.” I sucked in a breath, my eye darting now to the keg where Adam stood refilling his cup.
Jackson pulled away from me, a sad smile on his face. His eyes looked even greener than before. “That’s what I’ve been trying to tell you. I want to kiss you. You.”
And he was gone, walking away from me and heading for the door.
My fingers flew to my lips, untouched, but tingling now in a way they never had with Adam.
I want to kiss you. You.
I gasped. This was no longer about revenge. Jackson had meant it.
OMG NICE! I definitely swooned and felt the tension. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe touch about his eyes having some green in them is a great touch in the beginning :) Kept me totally interested. Loved how you weaved the details throughout so I knew what was going on without a big long back story.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Thanks for the read :)
I love this. Great sensory detail. My heart is aching. I want them to kiss. Want more. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for hosting. Fantastic entry.
I loved this! There was a real sense of character in Kristy - even as the backstory developed, you already had an idea of what she was like as a person. I thought Jackson was really captivating. The cliff-hanger ending was great as well; this kept me interested all the way through.
ReplyDeleteGreat scene, Frankie, and thanks for hosting the No Kiss Blogfest!
Great scene! Great idea for a blogfest, too!
ReplyDelete"Jenna once worked the math.' hahahahahaha! I love that line. In fact, I love this scene. It's got great pace and voice and REVENGE. But you really nailed it with the twist. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteHappy new beginnings to you, Frankie. And thanks for holding this fun fest again.
That was super cute! I love the turn of events. And I loved how she was a little feisty.
ReplyDeleteoooh! You're has a picture and everything!
ReplyDeleteExcellent build up! I really liked the description of the scene and the details leading up to the no kiss... well done!
ReplyDeleteMichael
Very nicely done. I'm not generally a fan of YA, but I really felt the teen angst/need to revenge on your best friend vibe. And the near kiss tension was great!
ReplyDeleteOhhh! Perfect! I love the added tension of him not wanting to kiss her for the wrong reasons because he wants so much to kiss her for the RIGHT ones. Well done, Frankie!
ReplyDeleteOoh the tension! Enjoyed it through and through, loved the voice in this, and the ending was kinda anti-climactic but sweet. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for organising this awesome blogfest!
Holy moly, that was crazy. In a good way, of course! haha. Great, great job Frankie! That was pretty intense... there was some awesome dialogue going on between the characters. Thanks for hosting such a great blogfest. :) I'll be putting up my entry later on today.
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Whoa! Heady stuff!
ReplyDeleteSuperb writing. This is a great blogfest. I hadn't signed up, but everywhere I go there are "no kisses" - how can I resist now?!
Oh my! This was crazy good, Frankie! I love how it was the girl who was pushing for the kiss and I LOVE his last line. I'm swooning over here! I hope this is something entirely new you're working on!
ReplyDelete*fans self* DAMN girl!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm glad I came back a day early for THIS--LOVE!
ReplyDeleteI'm a little slow, so it took me a minute to realize that this was a revenge no-kiss! *gasp* I enjoyed the twist you added to it. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteEeek! Eeek! Eeek! Picture me rolling on the ground squealing because it was sooo good. !!!
ReplyDeleteOooh, that was good. I loved the tension in here and the last moment where Kristy realizes what was going on--that was just golden. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThat was a great build up! Love the tension. Your mister linky isn't working right now, so I will get around to everyones later when it is back up.
ReplyDeleteLove the tension here. Yay for almost kissing!
ReplyDeleteWow! Brilliant build up to the almost kiss and then ahhhh. I love that she didn't realise what he meant until he said it. Fab!
ReplyDeleteThis was cute and sweet and really nice. Liked all the details and how you added stuff so I wasn't lost. Feels like there is lots of backstory here.
ReplyDeleteThat was pretty adorable. I definitely like Jackson more than Kristy with this, though. Also, there is quite a bit of backstory.
ReplyDeleteThe concept was good though. :)
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ReplyDeleteTry again! Mr Linky still isn't working, but here is my entry.
ReplyDeleteI love how he moved closer somehow and in the heat of the moment, she didn't even know how. This was a great scene!
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Very nice. She's not the usual character I'd care to read about but this is a great scene. Love the ending. And yay for another year of the no kiss blogfest!
ReplyDeleteHoly smokes, that was a great scene. Love the fact that she's a bit pushy for all the wrong reasons, and he's the one seeing the light. Then, at the end, he drags her face-first into it :D
ReplyDeleteThanks for hosting the blogfest!!
This. Is. Amazing. Cudos! I LOVE this scene.
ReplyDeleteI actually found you through, hmm, who was that? Anyway, I joined the blogfest just today, sorry for my lateness but thanks for hosting. I don't think my entry actually qualifies as a 'no kiss' but check it out and see what you think.
Great post! that rebel, Olivia
Okay, I give up. I've entered my url 3 times and it keeps showing up. But when I come back it's gone again. Wahhhh! :) Oh well.
ReplyDelete~that rebel, Olivia
Thanks everyone!!!! Your comments and excitement about this blogfest totally made my day! I'm still working my way to visit everyone else's posts:)
ReplyDeleteoh my, I definitely liked this; not only is there the tension of the impending kiss but everything else you've hinted at. You've got my interest.
ReplyDeleteYou tease! I loved it! I want more of this mysterious pair. I should have paid better attention to timelines, this was a great blogfest idea. Heading over to the other bloggers now :).
ReplyDeleteGOL!! (Gasp out loud) Haha, that was great! How sweet that he wants her for more than revenge...I officially love Jackson. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks for hosting!
Oh, I loved this. I'm with Julie, Jackson is now THE MAN!
ReplyDeleteFantastic scene ^_^ I loved how you fed in backstory and used it to build tension.
ReplyDeleteFrankie, puh-leeeeeeeeze check mine now. I have just posted mine entitled: The Reunion. Thanks. Thanks.
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