Happy Valentines Day Everyone!!! I'm so excited to be participating the in the Love at First Sight Blogfest! These blogfests are so much fun and such a great way to meet and discover other writers, it's a blast.
So I wasn't going to post anymore excerpts since I'm-this-close to entery Query Wars....but in honor of the holiday and because I've posted versions of this before...I thought...why not.
This isn't exactly what I'd call Love at First Sight...but there's definitely something there. It is the first time two of my characters meet, by running into each other. Literally. Enjoy:-)
From Stolen:
Sorry the excerpt has been removed!
Also, in honor of my AMAZING Linger giveaway and because I couldn't resist....this next scene is from Shiver:
And as I stood there in what I had thought was silence, I started to hear sounds that I hadn't before. The rustling os animals in the woods, turining over crisp leaves with their paws. The distant roar of trucks on the highway.
The sound of fast, ragged breathing.
I froze. I held my breath.
But the uneven gasps weren't mine.
I followed the sound, climbing cautiously onto the deck, painfully aware of the sound of each stair beneath my weight.
I smelled him before I saw him, my heart instantly revving up into high gear. My wolf. The the motion detector lights above the back door clicked on and flooded the porch with yellow light. And there he was, half sitting, half lying against the glass back door.
My breath caught painfully in my throat as I moved still closer, hesitant. His beautiful ruff was gone and he was naked, but I knew it was my wolf even before he opened his eyes. His pale yellow eyes, so familiar, flicked open at the sound of my approach, but he didn't move. Red was smeared from his ear to his desperately human shoulders--deadly war paint.
I can't tell you how I knew it was him, but I never doubted it.
Sigh....
And last but not least, today isn't just Valentines Day in my family--it's also my brother's birthday!
Happy Birthday Michael, I love you!!!
I love it! It's just a little bit flirtatious, and you can tell there's something there but they are both a little mean to each other. Nice.
ReplyDeleteSadly, I won't be participating in this blogfest :( I just don't have any first-sight scenes - my romance develops painfully slowly. I don't even think there's an "a-ha!" moment (in this book anyway), and they're first meeting is soooo not romantic or flirty at all. But I'll enjoy reading everyone else's entries :)
Thanks Heather, that's exactly what I was going for--they both start the novel with a quite a chip on their shoulders. And awww...you could always post an excerpt from a book like I did with Shiver:-)
ReplyDeleteHey, that was great! Loved it. I'm not entering the blogfest either. Writing a children's book which doesn't have too many saucy moments!
ReplyDeleteRyan and Lilliana's first meeting is still one of my favorite scenes. That is the scene where I fell in love with him! Great job as usual!
ReplyDeletewoo hoo nice job Frankie. I like how you let the scene unfold more slowly so the reader could enjoy the moment a bit longer. The imagery was very nice!!
ReplyDeleteThanks a bunch for commenting Wendy!
ReplyDeleteKelly, awww yay then it must really be love at first sight:-) Im glad.
Christina, oooh thank you. Im always worried that my scenes run waaay too long. This one has actually been majorly trimmed down and I'll probably find even more to cut as I keep going--but whooot--I like your assessment on this!
You kept me reading! I'm not just saying that to be nice either. I’m interested in the whole story from just that little bit.
ReplyDeleteAw thanks, Southpaw! Hopefully soon, you'll be able to read the whole thing.
ReplyDeleteWow. I liked both of these. But this line?
ReplyDeleteI can't tell you how I knew it was him, but I never doubted it.
Killer. :)
Nice work, Frankie. I love how you balance the outward hostility with the attraction lurking under the surface. A great set up for more tense interactions to come!
ReplyDeleteSarahjayne-thanks and yeah that line is killer, but all of Maggie's writing is:-)
ReplyDeleteLaurel, ooh yay thank you!
I definitely love the tension between the two characters! What a fun scene, and the way she describes his eyes and his voice.
ReplyDeleteLe sigh.
I love his surprise "chivalry" at the end of this scene. It is a sweet intimacy that is so different from the tough fronts they both wear.
ReplyDeleteWow, that was really good! :) Quite fluffy hehe.
ReplyDeleteWould you mind telling me what a blogfest is, exactly? I'm not quite sure, and I tried googling it but I never got an exact explanation. :P
I love reading your blog...can't wait to read more!
I love the tension in this scene-- and the jerky responses physically and attitudinally (I made that up!). I think it really shows how awkward they both feel, while pretending to maintain that totally-cool-I-don't-need-anybody-but-me exterior. It sounds like it will be exciting to see them get it together and feel each other out!
ReplyDeleteAmber, thanks a bunch:-)
ReplyDeleteTricia, hehe me too, that's what I was trying to achieve.
The Red Angel, thank you, Im glad you enjoyed and at the top of a post is a link to the blogfest explanation but basically a blogfest is whenever a blogger or group of bloggers unofficially decide to do a bunch of posts with a common theme on the same day--previously there's been a kissing day fest, a no kiss fest (which I hosted), a fight fest, and there are more coming.
Amalia, hahaha atitudinally! Love it, glad you enjoyed the scene:-)
ReplyDeleteAwesome - I wanted to keep reading and find out when they realize it's love. I really like the male character and how he is painted. Masculine yet tender. Love!
ReplyDeleteTrishaleigh, thank you!!! I appreciate that, and its quite some time before they realize...or rather before they can admit it's love, but that's definitely the start of the connection and attraction.
ReplyDeleteGreat scene, love the playful back and forth. And I ♥ a cocky hero. :) Happy Valentine's Day!
ReplyDeleteLove your scene and all the witty banter. thanks for sharing the Linger scene too.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE the snarky flirting Frankie!
ReplyDeleteAnd happy birthday to your brother!!
He won me over the moment he shocked her rigid by finding that chivalrous touch. Aah!
ReplyDeleteFrankie, I think you can feel confident that you're going into query wards with some great stuff. How cute are these two??? Awwww, and so romantic. A true hero cleaning up her cut ;)
ReplyDeleteAnd that excerpt from Shiver really makes me want to read it now. Can you believe I still haven't? Yikes.
Happy birthday to your brother!!
Wonderful interaction between your Stolen characters; love the struggle between anger, embarrassment, and interest. Just charming!
ReplyDeleteAnd, Shiver is simply intriguing. That she just knows its her wolf -- love the certainty of it.
Thank you for sharing!
Yay Frankie! Enjoyed both snippets thoroughly!!
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting.
Merissa
Love the fiery spunk of your MC, yet I also giggled at the hemophiliac line. Great scene!
ReplyDeleteRoni @ FictionGroupie thank you…me too—they’re sooo fun.
ReplyDeleteElle Strauss you’re welcome and thanks for commenting—and that scene from Shiver is awesome.
Sara McClung ♥ hehe its my favorite kind of flirting and thanks for the bday wishes for my brother!
Elaine 'still writing' Smith OMG your comment made me laugh out loud—awesome, Im glad he won you over bc he’s pretty awesome.
Carolina Valdez Miller awwww thank you! I so hope you’re right and thanks for wishing my bro a happy bday!
ThePreyers thank you and coming from you that’s a HUGE compliment!!! Squee!
Merissa awww thanks so much, glad you enjoyed!
Karen Amanda Hooper thank you, she is very spunky and the hemophiliac line makes me laugh too.
This was so fun! And left me wanting more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Tara!
ReplyDeleteWho doesn't love form fitting shirts!!!
ReplyDelete*Swoon* I'm a sucker for a man with an accent. Beautiful scene! Love the banter between the two characters. Good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene! I really like your chracter interactions. I wish I knew about the blogfest. Maybe next time.
ReplyDeleteI like the excerpt from Shiver too:)
Irish accent, huh? What is it with you American gals and the accents? I mean, not that I'm complaining or anything...
ReplyDeleteAre there any places in the world where people find an American accent endearing? Huh.
Oh, and nice excerpt. I like how he kept her waiting on his chivalry. :)
Daisy, hehehe love them!
ReplyDeleteCourtney, thanks and thanks for hosting!!!
Christine, thanks and yeah you'll have to do the next one.
Simon, hehehehe no I dont think so. AMerican accents are boring!
Thank you for answering my question. :) A blogfest sounds really exciting...Im thinking about participating in one in the future!
ReplyDeleteHa ha so cute, great ending. I love the fact that she's so hyper-aware of him, his blistered fingers and all, and then he's like, no girl, I'm just cleaning the cut on your cheek. Ha!!
ReplyDeleteHi Frankie! You did such a good job. I don't think the scene dragged. It made me want to read more as you built their believability! Nice job!
ReplyDeleteAs far as Shiver--I've got to read it! You've convinced me, girl!
BTW--thank you so much for dropping by my blog!
:)